to be honest I love this, the story looks original, the first chapter is so gripping and I like the way you made the conversation between kenz and her mother.

Great beginning.

Poor girl.

Good luck with this story, writing, and life.

Have a terrific day. :)

~Twilight Starr~

oh oh oh!
this is so...
oh my gosh.
i love it. truly. great start kristie, cant wait for the next chapter!!

First of all, I did find a few minor typos and stuff like that. Make sure what you post here is fully edited, as if you were going to publish it. Secondly, the story seems to happen too quickly. If you gave both characters a little more background, what happens with both of them will be that much more dramatic. Keep writing!