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| Caecilia 2008-07-16 ch 1,  | abuseThis is so cool!! At first it starts out creepy and you put in amazing description, which helps with the darkness of this piece. Surprised by the ending. I think that you might want to arrange the sentences differently though. I think that having it be in one long paragraph takes away from what the story could be... Then again, that could just be me; I don't like to write in paragraphs. Really good work! *for the Beer Run, at the Roadhouse-link in my profile* ~Caecilia |
| Twilight Starr 2008-07-10 ch 1, | abuseGreat job at description. The ending line was purely haunting. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| x day x dreamer x 2008-06-15 ch 1, | abusehaha, good twist! i really like this. at first i thought it was gruesome self-harm cutting, then i got the drift that the author was inflicting pain on another thing (person or creature), but I can honestly say i never expected it to end with a Jack-O-Latern. Good work :) ~srz |
| Hoodwynk 2008-02-19 ch 1, | abuseI liked the bit about a pendulum. It reminded me a bit of the Tell Tale Heart- how he so carefully, meticulously, delightfully, destroyed and incised the vulture man. |
| Lisastriker 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abuseNice twist. I was wondering what you were mutilating. I was thinking either a human or animal. It surprised me to discover a fruit! Good use of imagery! Keep it up! God bless. Thanks for the review. |
| Gladiator 2007-10-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseVery nicely done! (It definately beats mine...) I thought you were going for something disgusting, with all your talk about flesh and carving, so the jack-o-lantern suprised me. |