|Reviews for Cause and|
| Stella Grimshaw 10/3/07 . chapter 1
I liked your rhyme scheme and the use of the paratheses at the end.
| life on rewind 10/3/07 . chapter 1
Great writing with the potential to go far. Since it does have that potential, I’m sure you won’t mind some concrit:
Punctuation. It expresses places where you want the reader to pause and helps with flow and metre. If you dislike using punctuation, I respect that, but if you’re open to comments then maybe you should consider this one!
Thank you for posting this! Maybe you wouldn’t mind checking out a few of my writings too if you feel like it and liked the review? If you do, I recommend my rants. I hope the concrit helped!
[Yes, I copy/paste most of my reviews. So sue me. The concrit changes per review, and you get tips, right? Win/win situation. End of.]