plot and characters are interesting, but there are lots of grammar and spelling mistakes.

love the story.
can't wait to find out more...
especially with this new bet... lol
=]
update soon!

I LOVE it‼ UPDATE!

.: Savvy :.

Urg, I feel that Sean kind of has a problem -I know what you're gonna say, "No, really?"-, but yes I do think that he does. Can't wait for another chapter.

Wow. You sure seem excited about your family arriving. I love the chapter. Good job. I can't wait to see what the surprise is. XD

Uh oh, she get's kidnapped by a physo :) Right now, I'm not liking Sean very much...

I really like it and can't wait to read the next chapter. Good work. I hope that the next chapter involves a possible intimate seen. XD

I like it. You should definetly continue. I can't wait to get to the part that was previewed in the summary. It's a really good story. XD

By all means continue. You've got me hooked now. I want to know waht's going on. Well written by the way though I might suggest a little tactic known as proofreading. That's just to fix the techie stuff though. Aside from typos and things of that nature, I liked this story very much and would like to see more of it. Do the plot and see where it ends. Also, you should go with your desire for thrill and add in more violence. You do it well^^. Update soon!

~*dangelicessence*~

Although this could easily pass as a short oneshot, I think it has potential to be a story. I hope you continue...

Your summary is what caught my attention... I'd love to read how it fits into the rest of your idea.

~Dreamless~

It was fantastic. A number 10, I give it. I actuallyr ead the whole thing without skimming, which is what I usually do when I start losing interest. I love gruesome killings, and battles. Unfortunately Im not very good at describing it, but this was fantastic. The summary caught my attention, and I hope this is a story Im looking forward to.