i really enjoyed all of the indie allusions throughout the prose, its like a hidden easter egg, waiting quiet ly for you to stumble upon it.

Oh, that is beautiful. I love prose poetry, and I don't write a lot of it, either (not in this format, anyway), but it's so fantastic in small doses. I love how you used the song titles, too - it was really fun putting the titles with the bands. Fantastic. I need to put you on my alerts. Keep writing! :)

I like the speed and energy of this. It shifts and spins so quickly that the reader is caught up in the pace, which enhances the word choice after the second read. The way that you've intermingled song titles with word bursts is an excellent example of how many of us hear life, and interpret our worlds from lyrics, and words, and emotional avalanches of beauty like this. I always like reading stream of consciousness works. They seem so true and vibrant. Well done. MD:77.

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