Robin Smith
2007-11-04
ch 1,  | abuseAbsolutely thrilling, entertaining, and exciting! I like Ty's and Thissa's icy blue eyes. I could imagine them in my head. Good descriptions of them. Strong characters! Sentences were very descriptive and flowed nicely. You descibed the ion storm very well. Good description of the creature. I got chills down my spine reading about him attacking. I really felt for Shirka's mum. You are a TERRIFIC writer and I am impressed. I disagree with you saying that this manuscript wasn't that good. And if this was your first one, wow! I bet your other ones are fantastic! I can imagine myself being in a bookstore and buying one of your books! : ) Have a great day! |
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