I love the paradoxes. Goes very well with the title "Asparatame girl". Fakefakefakefakefake.

well, it doesn't ahev to fit the haiku format to be a haiku, but i see oyur point. it's a lovely poem, i really enjoyed reading it.

live, laugh, love.

Creaitng a Dream

Haha...I'm into emo-pop...I don't think the modern sense of "emo" requires "underground" - it's come to mean any song that focuses on strong emotion or depressive feelings. See all artists signed to Decaydance. XD

"Sucralose sweetheart" - she's not really a sweetheart, but somehow all the more sweet for it? ;)

Incidentally, have you ever heard Weird Al's "Close But No Cigar"? He sings "sweeter than aspartame"!

haha this is so freaking true

i just love how you related this to the summary.

it doesn't really matter that the last line 'runs over'

this is really awesome.

I'm not sure why, but this made me smile. Maybe it's just the way it's written or the authors note afterwards, but I did enjoy this haiku.

Peace, Daze

You are close. I like it because I'll probably have this stuck in my head a while. Good job!

Write on!

Isn't this still a haiku- in the alternate form of 5-7-7 syllables? I'm not sure. Anyway, good short poem! I like how you've parodied fads (mainstream indie haha).