|Reviews for Aspartame girl|
| creepy kiss on tuesday 3/15/08 . chapter 1
I love the paradoxes. Goes very well with the title "Asparatame girl". Fakefakefakefakefake.
| Alphabetical Dreams 2/9/08 . chapter 1
well, it doesn't ahev to fit the haiku format to be a haiku, but i see oyur point. it's a lovely poem, i really enjoyed reading it.
live, laugh, love.
Creaitng a Dream
| kenansense 12/30/07 . chapter 1
Haha...I'm into emo-pop...I don't think the modern sense of "emo" requires "underground" - it's come to mean any song that focuses on strong emotion or depressive feelings. See all artists signed to Decaydance. XD
"Sucralose sweetheart" - she's not really a sweetheart, but somehow all the more sweet for it? ;)
Incidentally, have you ever heard Weird Al's "Close But No Cigar"? He sings "sweeter than aspartame"!
| Tytherpol 11/4/07 . chapter 1
haha this is so freaking true
i just love how you related this to the summary.
it doesn't really matter that the last line 'runs over'
this is really awesome.
| Dale Christopher 10/16/07 . chapter 1
I'm not sure why, but this made me smile. Maybe it's just the way it's written or the authors note afterwards, but I did enjoy this haiku.
| Nonya Soum 10/4/07 . chapter 1
You are close. I like it because I'll probably have this stuck in my head a while. Good job!
| Eagle Seance 10/4/07 . chapter 1
Isn't this still a haiku- in the alternate form of 5-7-7 syllables? I'm not sure. Anyway, good short poem! I like how you've parodied fads (mainstream indie haha).