Ohmygosh... This was brilliant...
Those metaphors were simply AMAZING.

I have never been in love, i've been infatuated, enamored, and a whold bunch of other big ** words but never in love. I've never really minded that fact but this made me almost yearn to be in love, so that I can truly understand what you're saying. This was very well written, beautiful and meaningful and with a depth of though that didn't require annoyingly obscure thoughts and images in order for the feelings to get across. Thank you very much for writing this.

Loved it.
I ran out of adjectives and superlatives, sorry.

The best I can do is tell you I really liked it.
I think the first story I read of yours was To Be A Suitable Heroine. I'm not too sure, but I remember the way reading Counting Chickens seriously made a huge impact on me. Mimi was such a lovely girl ... :)

My favorite stanza is the Wendy one. It's so pretty! Peter Pan love stories are all the rage, damn.

you made me cry! especially the wendy stanza! the whole imagery of him as a lost boy and you his wendy. aw. let's stay in never-never-land!

this was beautiful.

Wow... that was beautiful.

I love the lullaby and the Wendy part especially. It's just so good. I can almost hear someone speaking the words out... it's that good. : D

god, i love this.
i wish i was able to write something like this.

Aw! I love the wendy-girl part! Very romantic and almost a desperate vibe. It's amazing.

favorite lines:

and this pulsing red mass in my chest is
wanting you.

Darling, let's stay in Never-Never-Land
For Ever-ever and

You are a beautiful writer. =)

hm. very interesting (rubs chin) very interesting.i like how i don't know where to begin or end. but at last i know the fleeting feeling of this poem (story?) ... or do i? =]

wow, this is probably what everyone feels when they fall in love, you've just been lucky enough to know exactly how to word it. :) love it love it love it.

Well, I'm not a fan of poetry, but I thought I'd give it a chance because I'm a big fan of yours (have been for a couple years now, actually). So even though I don't particularily like poetry, I really really liked this poem, and even if I did like poetry, I would still really really like this poem.

It was just so graceful and romantic, plus I enjoyed some of your more subtle rhyming, like 'had' and 'Land' (whether on purpose or by accident, it doesn't matter).

Although I am curious as to why there was the line, "...and i stare at your lips too often" in the preview, but not in the poem itself. I mean, it's no biggie or anything that it wasn't in there (it's a nice line though). I was just wondering.

Now I'm wondering if perhaps I should give the rest of your poetry a look-see.

Oh, and P.S: I'm pretty stingy with reviews; I only give them when I am thoroughly impressed. Just thought I'd let you know.

I lovelovelove this.
It sounds like you're taking all those thoughts in your mind and literally throwing them at a sheet of paper, and it's gorgeous because of that.
'(baby at least I can talk heat transfer and life for hours)'
That line is amazing. [:

'Darling, let’s stay in Never-Never-Land/For Ever-ever'
It reminds me of a cheesy line from a song that you don't actually understand until you read the lyrics, but in a good way.

Wow, that was wow. I have no words. I'm not a very romantic person, but this poem touched me. It has so much raw emotion and feeling and I love the run-on style of the lines. I could just imagine someone saying it, nervously, not wanting to be rejected but wanting to express their feelings... I don't know if that was the vibe, but htat's what I felt.

I especially loved "I’ll lie tangent to the line of your waist
And this science is not my forte but
I could try"
That was sweet, and real, and raw all at the same time. The boy you had in mind must be incredibly special. I'm very impressed. I'm going to go check out your other stuff now, so I'll probably be reviewing you again soon.

LOVE. LOVE. LOVE.