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clumsybella15 2008-03-04 ch 1,	abuseI like it, but try adding a bit more to it. Her feelings, emotions, describe a bit more. Add more detail. Maybe her mask could be her whole body and then it breaks like a shell. Just an idea.
Arina222 2008-01-11 ch 1,	abuseIt's PERFECT! I love it! I have nothing more to say. Actually - don't change ANYTHING.
life on rewind 2007-10-04 ch 1,	abuseGreat writing with the potential to go far. Since it does have that potential, I’m sure you won’t mind some concrit: Your poetry doesn’t have to be so structured – it’s called “free verse” for a reason :P Be more bold with your line breaks, go crazy with metre! You don’t have to break after every clause. Make use of breaking off incomplete sentences. Not every line has to be a sentence broken off by a comma and a full stop. Let it flow! Maybe remove the double spacing? Loved the emotion in this ... Thank you for posting this! Maybe you wouldn’t mind checking out a few of my writings too if you feel like it and liked the review? If you do, I recommend my rants. I hope the concrit helped! Sakura. [Yes, I copy/paste most of my reviews. So sue me. The concrit changes per review, and you get tips, right? Win/win situation. End of.]
carousel chorus 2007-10-04 ch 1,	abuseI love this, its absolutely beautiful. Amazing work!