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CrimsonTear02 2008-02-22 ch 3,	abuseokay...this may be a stupid question but...if you retired your old account...does that mean that WitchHunt is now discontinued?
SympleSymon 2007-12-22 ch 3,	abuseThe plot thickens! And many questions are answered...great chapter!
SympleSymon 2007-12-22 ch 2,	abuseNice chapter, and I can see where the similarities between this fic and Cowboy Beebop are being drawn by other readers. I really enjoyed the action in this! SympleSymon
Madness-Soldier 2007-11-18 ch 1,	abuseYo Janz, it's yo' boy Madness. Sorry it took me so long to review this, but better late than never. Anyway, it is a definite, that Outlaw has made an impact on me already. He just seems like the Spike Spiegel of the group while Aryan seems so much more like a Train Heartnet from Blackcat. Anyway, great chapter, and Lucy is kind of creepy man.
KurenaiYume 2007-10-26 ch 3,	abuseReads up to Chapter Three Ok, time for the review! Let me see, there is one thing I really like other than Outlaw and Alice duo - reminds me a little of Jet Black and Spike Spiegel of Cowboy Bebop - is the whole atmosphere the story has. There's a combination of a comedy, action, and drama that really drives this story well. I'm not sure if you've seen Black Cat, but it does remind me of it in many ways, especially with Lucy being a biological weapon like Eve from BC. Now, about your characters, I don't have anything much to say about them since I really can't find anything wrong with them. Your characters really carry a life of their own with their own personality, their own set of ideals, and such: Aryan is the serious, straightforward, leader of the group (similar to Train from BC), Outlaw is the somewhat comical, lighthearted member (Similar to Sven, but generally different), Alice is nearly the opposite of Outlaw in nearly every way, Lucy is the most naive of the group (a very close resemblance to Eve), while the Jean-Paul and Nero duo are oddly comical despite their (current) association with the church who is after Aryan and Co. With that said, all I have to say is just continue with what you have character-wise. Just try not to fall into the pitfalls of having stereotypical (or cliche) characters as you continue writing. Though I don't see that happening anytime soon. What does need improvement is probably more with your presentation. Here's one example: ...1.)he had fair skin, 2.)he had a usual half-frown, and 3.)even without number two... Avoid doing this. This just makes your writing look really, really bad. Always use letters - a good rule is that use letters until you go past ten - and use numbers when you have a gigantic figure you want to write down, or for historical dates, etc. Other than that, I really don't see anything wrong with your writing other than the general typo, or unclear sentences, or tenses. Just one indepth revision will catch most of them, since there aren't that many in the first place. There is that issue of clarity, but I don't think it's that serious...yet. A final note: Other than the above issue, I really do like the way you added in the references seamlessly in the story without giving the impression that they were forced in - or at least, I didn't think it was. It fleshed out Nero's character as a philosopher, added special meaning to the story, and revealed quite a bit about the history. Great job! Well, that's it for my review! If you have any questions or concerns, please send them to my secretary - aka. "Send Message" - on my profile. Good luck with this, and keep writing!
Melissa Norvell 2007-10-26 ch 3,	abuseI've read the last two chapters and I can say that this is definitely getting good. I like the interaction of all of the characters. Since this is a dark work, I'll add it to my C2 Community! Thanks for the great read, and by the way, I updated Sacrifice!
SexySpoonsWillRuleUsAll 2007-10-24 ch 3,	abuseThis chapter provided a lot of answers. Great job! I hope you'll update soon, but no pressure or anything :P
SexySpoonsWillRuleUsAll 2007-10-24 ch 2,	abuseNEVER eat the clam chowder. Ever. Outlaw's growing on me, he's col! I liked the fight scenes, I think you handled them very well. Great job!
SexySpoonsWillRuleUsAll 2007-10-24 ch 1,	abuseAWESOME. Really, really awesome. You had me sucked in from the first line. I like Aryan a lot :D
Twilight Starr 2007-10-22 ch 3,	abuseI like the chapter titles. The story is very interesting. I'm looking forward to seeing where it's going. ^^ ~Twilight Starr~
Twilight Starr 2007-10-22 ch 2,	abuseI love Alice's "except you" comment. Great chapter. ~Twilight Starr~
Twilight Starr 2007-10-22 ch 1,	abuseGreat start. Nice sort of mystery about the girl. The end of the beginning chapter leaves me wanting to read more to find out more about Lucifer. Thanks for the review of my story "Reckoning". I really appreciate it. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a brilliant day. ~Twilight Starr~
Patrick007 2007-10-21 ch 3,	abusegood story. nero doesn't seem half-bad for a nox archbishop. can't wait for more chapters.
Nanao Nagase 2007-10-20 ch 3,	abuseYour story keeps on sucking me in, you know. The fight scenes are flawless, absolutely captivating. And you seemed to have put in a lot of research and work into your story; your references are proof of that. Nero's an interesting person. Was expecting a more hardline character as the Archbishop, but his personality was the reverse of what I thought he would be. I'm hoping there wil be more action in the next chapter, but I don't think you'll disappoint. I enjoyed reading it. Great job. Nanao
The Melody of a Broken Hear... 2007-10-16 ch 1,	abuseLong overdue for a review eh? Can't say much nor can I tell you advise to help you improve this chapter. I been doing odd things lately and one of them is complamenting sucide, but don't worry, not yet, not till get my novels publish. But it's getting unbearable. I hate this... i so hate this but enough about me, I'm interested but not into it just yet. YOu didn't went too deep into this chapter and i'm starting to like long explainable chapters. Anyways, welcome back old friend and remember, we're starting back up a new group once I get my life back together. Later

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