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| Tranquil Thorns 2007-10-05 ch 1,  | abuseBeautifully composed. I love your choice of narrator. It makes things all the more interesting, and I think it's a nice change to see things from the eyes of the actual predator. You can almost pity him, I think. 'A frog seems to have found its way in my throat!' is probably one of my favorite lines. =D It's just so... humorous and fitting with what you were trying to capture. I admit I got kinda lost by the ending part. =X |