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the sacred night 2007-10-07 ch 3,	abuseI like this. There are some typos, but that happens. There are parts where it could be more eloquent, but that's part of what makes it sound like a person really said it on the spur of the moment. There are maybe even parts where it's too eloquent.
the sacred night 2007-10-07 ch 2,	abuseI like environmental poems ^_^ I think this piece has a lot of potential, and I like the imagery of giving the Earth crappy things instead of taking care of it. I think you could say them in a more poetic way, though, and again, you have the parts where you tell us right out what to feel instead of actually making us feel it.
the sacred night 2007-10-07 ch 1,	abuseAww :( I'm sorry you're sad. I like some of the lines in this, like the lines that have actual details of what was done & said, but some of the parts where you interpret it for us are unnecessary. Cheer up Sissy, you're 18!