I couldn't help reading another story of yours after the bad mood. I really do love both these characters too xD
Although it was a short read, i still enjoyed it and Your ending was really well written. =)

Aww! That was a great story! I love your writing style.

Your ending was really well written and so was the entire story.

Happy Writing

--Alex

I wish there was a definite ending, but I suppose leaving it up to the reader is a good strategy too.

I liked this story a lot, overall. There were a few awkward sentences here and there, but it was well written, and I liked the characters. I liked how you didn't reveal the master's name. That was a nice touch. :)

Two things:

1. He punched THROUGH his master's body? Weird.

2. And at the end, she faints into Theo's arms. So then how does this happen afterward? "Alice took several deep breaths to steady herself and shifted her position slightly. Her legs were getting cramp from not having moved for so long. She wanted to cry, to let out all her pent-up emotions, but she didn't dare."

That confused me. But other than that, good chapter!

Yay! He doesn't totally hate her anymore! And when she asked him what time it was, i started laughing. Seriously..her mind is messed up.

That wasn't exactly surprising. When the lights weren't working, it was kind of obvious that Theo would come back, or someone was there. But what I find interesting is that Theo blames her, and yet before he died, he really liked her. And she did run away to get help. Those must just be minor details in his mind, i guess.

A great first chapter. The opening line was gripping, and it continued to keep my interest. Alice is an interesting character..she's already well developed, and this is only the first chapter. Same thing with Theo, though. It's like I know them..and i can't wait to keep reading.

sup? that was excellent, really, i haven't read a good story like this for a long time! thanks for making my day. another thing, the quotes u use at the beginning of each chapter a really good, they way they correspond to the content of the chapter.
really good work, seriously.

Hello,

Oh..my..God! The story was so funny. I know it's supposed to be dark and scary, I but found it was very humorous. I really liked it. The relationship between Alice and Theo were very CUTE *squeeze* When he came back to see her, Alice was scared the hell out of her yet remained standing there. And Theo seriously going to take her life? I mean she went to get help for real. She was so shaky. I don't blame her for when she run to get help and also running away.

Please I really wish I do continue writing the story. I was thrilled reading it. I love to read the ending for this story.

Please write more!

Best wishes,
KaronePrincess

I liked it
It was short and sweet
A great job on it :)

that was an awsome story!

Cool.

this is a RIP OFF of my story BLACK SILENCE OF THE NIGHT!~! HOW DARE U! U HAVE NERVE!

Aw...so adorable!! Loved the chapter!

o...interesting! update again soon!