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| Alexander d'Alkemade 2007-10-07 ch 3,  | abuseall right, good second chapter, though its pretty short. Your grasp of Norse myth is amazing. Even though this is clearly a seperate story, I can see it just being another part of the Germanic/Norse mythos. I think I would like another "scene", in which we can read about Sigurn and her betrothed. You seem to be breaking the ancient "show us, don't tell us" rule a bit too much in the chapter having events fly by without any real description. oh yeah, the appendix is helpful too! Alex |
| Alexander d'Alkemade 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abuseyou have done it again sir. I'm intrigued by this story. What is an elemri? an elemental? I am reminded of Actaeon and Artemis, is there a conection? the only thing I found wrong was the stag saying he was a "freak". I would suggest a different word. |