 CalypsoDreaming 2008-01-02 . chapter 1Very, very interesting piece. Beautiful imagery from the very beginning until the very end. The first line, if referring to a clinic for the mentally disabled, is very ironic and very intriguing. I love the line 'The lights aren't bright, but they're showing you off' - it really emphasises the beauty or greatness of the person to whom the narrator is referring to. There is some beautiful personalisation in the line 'my shoes can't breathe', which I also love as it emphasises the feeling of entrapment. Brilliant irony in the 'wake room' line, and the phrase 'swim in comfort' is lovely.
The last couple of lines of the first stanza and the second stanza are a lot harder to understand than the rest of the poem, but the general feeling I got from it was lovely, one of sadness and bitter nostalgia.
Great poem, well done! |