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| Tikklz 2007-10-07 ch 1,  | abuseThis isn't AS wonderful as some of your other stuff, but I don't say that to do damage to your ego. This is still much better than ANYTHING else I've read lately. The first two stanzas didn't seem to have as much...uh... Oomph? But I really like the phrase "the instruction manual's helpful in an identity crisis" and "caution: it is dangerous to exceed the stated dose" So good. |