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Christina 2008-05-01 ch 10, anon.	abuseOMG that was so sad! The phone convo made me start awwing in sadness and totally creeping my brother out! I love this story, can't wait til you update!
Kenya Bloodstone 2008-04-29 ch 10,	abuseLOL I love this chapter Nick is so amusing. I laughed when he started to search Mr. Robert's room and I had the same thoughts as he did about the blueberry lube lol. Lucy is a ** for hurting Nicky like that hugs Nick its okay luv Mr. Robert's is there for you. I can't help but wonder what Mr. Robert's would have done had he caught Nick crying in his room. Anyway Kudos tons of times. Much love hugs hugs x please update soon!
LandUnderWave 2008-04-29 ch 10,	abuseAah, I really am turning into a horrible reviewer... I do love the tone of this chapter, though. Nick is win. And I wonder why Mr. Roberts is pretending to be a gym teacher...I'm not sure 'pervert' is a good enough reason. wonders Oh, and The German Guy is becoming one of my favourite characters. Just because.
Liviania 2008-04-29 ch 10,	abuseEr, why do ya'll call it 'bog roll'? I was totally afraid to google it as well. (Of course, my friends enjoy having my google something without telling me I'll want to bleach my brain after.) I keep . . . Benadryl, mittens, and an iPod in my bedside drawer. And other random crap. I need to organize my drawers now. This is disgraceful. (My sunscreen and jewelry are in one drawer. This drawer also includes antibiotic cream and tweezers. . . . why did this not bother me earlier?) Livi
jaybriel 2008-04-27 ch 10,	abuseIt's awesome that you can create a character that's so endearing, even when he's engaged in activities that seriously offend my own code of morals...not that I think that what he's doing is implicitly wrong, more that I'd never have the courage to do it myself. Okay, not really making much sense..what I'm trying to say is that I'm seriously impressed that you managed to integrate a psychological breakdown as to why Nick has no problems with searching the room into the narrative in a way that not only avoided disjointing it but also maintained the humour. I give up, was attempting to write an english essay which probably explains why I'm having problems expressing myself in simple terms (why those teachers choose to punish themselves by awarding higher marks for intelligent verbosity is completely beyond me). I shall just have to resort to the overused, pathetically generic but no less true, "You rock." And yes, I do realise that you asked for criticism but the only things I can really think of to say on that are that: 1. It needs to be a bit longer, mostly so that my reading pleasure is sustained for longer, but also because as funny and enjoyable as this chapter was nothing much actually happened, so while it is about the same length as other chapters, it felt shorter. 2. There were a couple of little spelling errors and a few comma's that raised eyebrows (but only when I went back looking for things to criticse - you're so demanding ^_^). The only thing that kind of irritated my was this, "Lovely woman, my mother is." You should probably leave off the, "is," on the end there...unless of course your whole idea was to go Yoda on us...in which case, by all means...^-^
Midnights Scream 2008-04-26 ch 10,	abuseI'd hate Lucy too. Poor guy and his crappy friends. I think he and the gym teacher would be VERY interesting. :) I'm excited about it.
Kilian 2008-04-26 ch 10,	abuseI keep thinking that Nick isn't the down-to-heart person he likes to think he is. And if I had to live at his home, with his family and all the residents, I'd go crazy.
pplofthewrldeatcheese 2008-04-25 ch 10,	abuseThis chapter was really cool! You asked for criticism and you shall have it! 1). It's kind of annoying they way He thinks 'like' almost every paragraph, but sometimes it works, like you get into his head better and it makes sense. Other times its kinda 'valley girl' sounding. 2). Why does he say 'fudge' in his head but '' when he talks to people? 3) Ireallrealrealrealy liked this chapter! I hope the snooping around bits him in the later when they are so getting it on. And then the blueberry lube pops up and Nick starts laughing hysterically or something. Or Dougie shows up because he seems like the kind of person that just has bad timing... well keep writing and being awesome!
Alice 2008-04-25 ch 10, anon.	abuseWow, you're just going update crazy! With Intent, Mise en Place, Out of Bounds, and a new one all (almost) within a month. This is awesome!
A Scarred Soul 2008-04-25 ch 10,	abusehaha More slang! lol I would have been a bit afriad to google bog roll as well, though I thought it might have something to do with a wrap, since Mr. Roberts is a PE teacher. Hm, I'm very intrigued as to why he has new PE related books, but I figure it could always have to di with him liking to keep his books nice. I'm kinda like that. lol I don't this was a bad chapter, definitely nothing worth critisism. (God I cannot spell that word to save my life!) All I have to say about it that's different is that it's kinda tense sounding during the conversation, but that's to be expected during something like that. I don't think its bad or anything. It was very enjoyable to read, I loved the history of his snooping escapades. hehe I can't wait for more!
ren 2008-04-25 ch 10, anon.	abuseI did google it, lol! fan-freaking-tastic! update hurriedly pweasy!
mandraco 2008-04-25 ch 10,	abuseLol at your last author's note. Sometimes you are just too British for your own good. This is my favourite line: Jesus. I have the worst taste in men. To think, I was considering ** over him on his own bed. Lucy should have handled the situation better (because I think she could have guilted Nick into letting her go out with Angel boy). But Nick always knew it was a lost cause... this is just what he needs to get himself over him. Lucy shouldn't be going out with Angel boy anyway, because he is totally a jerk. Of course, Nick liking Angel boy less inevitably leads to him fancying the demon gym teacher more, but I think he can deal with that. As for criticism of this chapter, I don't really have any. I thought it flowed reasonably well, but then it struck me how un-geeky I am... except that really the only thing I didn't get was Darlik era Doctor Who. And I will share that blueberry lube has me reminded of the baby food my cousin made for her son... that he didn't like. She stewed the berries and put them in with yoghurt... (does that have an 'h'? Firefox doesn't seem to think so... but the h comes first in wiki so I'm going with that still) That is all. =) Mandraco.
Pundit 2008-04-24 ch 10,	abuseAw, I love his hissy fit. It's so cute pinches his cheeks and ruffles hair. My favorite line, by far, was: “And if you do this again with anyone else, I’ll kill you and then I’ll kill him and then I’ll just top myself to make it nice and Shakespearean.” Can't wait to find out the deal with Mr. Roberts. Nicky is extremely observant, and that's always fun ^_^
Catseye*Rose 2008-04-24 ch 10,	abuseI'm glad you explained what a bog roll was, cuz I was kinda worried ^^; Hee. Ha, he's so sneaky! XD I like his prepared excuses. Seem pretty solid to me :P Hm...PE books...how intriguing...he is SO hiding something. Oh, wow, Lucy's calling him already? I'm assuming she's still all evil and stuff...blah. But maybe things will look up for him...? At least romance-wise...? Hopefully...? XD Looking forward to what craziness happens next!!
Nina 2008-04-24 ch 1, anon.	abuseI had to venture and read your other works and this one is definately my second favorite (my first is With Intent.) Things running through my head: Why is he pretending to be a gym teacher? Is Nick a fan of Blueberry lube? Lucy is a *h!

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