this isn't a sonnet. dont you know the rules of a sonnet?

14 lines with the ababcdcdefefgg pattern and the 10 syllables in ech line and the hard and soft sounds every other syllable?

This is really beautiful. The emotion and the word choice is really exquisite.

The only issue I have with it is that I don't see how it's a sonnet. Sonnets have rhyme schemes, I don't know about all types of sonnets but this doesn't have any rhyme scheme. yours is like: ABCDEFEGBHIJKLM

I wouldn't have really thought of it as a sonnet if you hadn't titled it a sonnet and broken it up into quatrains and a couplet at the end, which looks like shakespearian in which case you don't have the rhyme scheme or the iambic pantameter.

I would consider this more of a really beautiful free-verse. Like I LOVED it I just don't think you should call it a sonnet...

Best Wishes,

Kitty

PS: sorry to critices your form. I really loved the poem, it's just not a sonnet (at least not in any form I know of, I don't know a lot, but I'm learning and haven't come across it).

very very good job! Thats something - coming from me.

Interesting and heartfelt. I wasn't quite sure the second quatrain made sense, though. (Incidentally, I assume that the e e cummings-esque avoidance of capitals and punctuation is deliberate. I can't decide if it works or not.) I like the last couplet.

That is something in 100 years children will read in school and not think twice, although a select few will use that beauty and hold it, remember it and and love it. I think a tear almost tried to drop

Sonnets work best under strict metrical rules. So I thought it wasn't much until I read for the meaning carefully. It is very lovely. And to see such a classic style is appealing.