 whisperslilhopper 2008-02-07 . chapter 1I generally don't like story types that are this short, but you did a good job with it. Although the title is "all hope gone" I think Leo still had some left. You can almost hear it in his voice as he answers his phone. Excellent imagery. |
 concerto49 2008-02-02 . chapter 1Hm, we do live for a reason and why should. Some people do say we can lose everything but hope. I more think it's our goals and dreams. If we lose everything we care for we are as dead as it gets. |
 The Storyteller's Daughter 2007-10-16 . chapter 1Heartbreaking story, and very descriptive. Maybe you can provide more details about their relationship. |
 nuttx 2007-10-09 . chapter 1I beat you at emo-ness! XD
Nice work, 'muff. I agree with Luna - nice descriptive intro paragraph.
...but I'd like to point out that in "...he chucked away...", the 'chucked' really doesn't fit the atmosphere, and ruins the emo-ness. |
 Luny Loona 2007-10-08 . chapter 1Hey you, I reckon you should open your anonymous reviewing. Anyway...you so do not seem the type to write that, but anyway...I see you've got yourself a reviewer! Congrats!
Nice descriptions at the top. No comments to the other lines. |
 Oracle of Destiny 2007-10-07 . chapter 1Aww, that was so sad not to mention depressing. I feel sorry for Leo... |