 Tikklz 2007-10-07 . chapter 1This is very nice. Just a gentle, easy going poem. You really set the tone very well. Something that will help you learn to extend your creative arm: try not to use adverbs like "blissfully" and "rhythmically." We all have different impressions of what those kinds of words mean. By using something else to describe them, it gives a clearer view of what you want to get across.
Nice job, keep it up! :) |