|Reviews for Rise and Fall of the Sea|
| hey maria 10/7/07 . chapter 1
I don't think you should say outright that his eyes are beautiful or his lips are incredible, but use words that describe why they're beautiful/incredible. The way you said his lips trail like velvet, for example; that was great.
I like the way this poem progresses, it's very calm and rhythmic and it reminds me of the sea. Nice job.