Oh God. It's not fair! I want your writing! WAH! Just kidding.

Cheers! ~Kat

I love they way you wrote this. It's confusing with a subtle touch of weird, but that fits the theme nicely.

It also has a soft, pleasant flow.

My opinion-It's a nice but strange poem. A fine piece of art. It's more prose than poetry, though.

~Imperfect

Interesting way to describe a mental breakdown. Very nice job on this. Well written and to the point.

~Arafax~