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so i pretty much luved this... it was so...clipped and abrupt and almost feeling less with its narration, kinda jst lyk a list of facts but i was like omg when she died cuz for sum reason i felt lyk i could relate...
absolutely beautifully written!
much luv
Sarahh xoxo

This is a very interesting piece. I think you could easily put this under poetry instead of fiction, but it works in this category just as well. It might get more of the attention it deserves in poetry, though. Nice work!