That was great!
--Hope

that is so beautiful, relates to everyday life :)
anie.

I like how you never came out into detail on who "she" is. This makes the reader numb to the woman (or girl?) in the story, yet strangely compelled to know more about her. At the same time, you have embodied the emotion of loneliness and hopelessness. This is a beautiful work, great job.

-Mob, SN

Wow, an interesting turn at the end there. Good writing, as usual! x

Well look who I found... haha. Yes, I know, hiatus, naughty. Whatever *wink*.

Wow. Your word choice is divine, lanuage emotive, and concept absolutely haunting. You conjure up a tangible and tragic sense of isolation extremely well. I am so deeply impressed right now - you've blown me away. Well done!

Lexie

That's powerful; descriptive, relating to a possible every-day situation. I like how you constructed it together. Nice work. :)

Whoa. That was intense to read. Great job portraying it! I had to yell at my sister to come in here so she could read it also =]