amazing writing. i love the rhyming scheme, and the concept is brilliant. i hope this hasn't actually happened to you, but in a way i guess that would make it all the more powerful...whatever. basically, i loved this poem and it's an immediate fave :3

Very emotional and haunting.

You chose all the right words. I can piece the situation together and feel the ache and emotion story.

Very touching.

wow... this is precious. not truths i hope. that would be terrible. but i'd understand how you felt, my brother almost passed away when he was born, that was three years ago. now he's in preschool and i just hope that this was just a stroke of genius (spelling) and it didn't really happen to you. much love

xoxo and all that jazz

Velvet