When you are dead you will either go to heaven or hell, thats the truth. Please don't let yourself go to hell. It's a terrible place. God loves you and he wants you. Except the gift of salvation...it will change your life, trust me! Anne P.S. Thanks for the review!

Great poem.

Twilight Starr

good work

I liked it, it had a nice concept to it- "I renounced to be the fairy tale's princess." But you could probably have used "refused" or another word instead of "renounced" because it can't be used with "to be", I don't think.

And where you say "with no doubt, that someone would be you always you", you need a comma between "you" and "always you".

Other than that, I really think your grammer is improving. Great job! :)

this is freaking awesome! i love it. i could picture a classic romance movie playing in my head. i think you should make it into a story and see what happens.