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GrannyP 2008-07-02 ch 3,	abuseThis story needs and update, pronto! Seriously! It's funny! And it has clowns! Sad clowns and freaks! And I loved the fact that Edgar's deformity was beauty. That was just great, and definitely something I would like to point out about certain people that I know. So yeah... I would greatly appreciate it if you would take advantage of this wonderful summer and spend it indoors writing stuff that you haven't written in a while. Just for me. Because I asked nicely. Isn't that am appropriate request? No, not really, but I still requested it anyway. So yeah, I like this one! More?
GrannyP 2008-07-02 ch 2,	abuseOh goodness! I LOVE awkward young romances like this! And the fact that the poor guy was in drippy clown make up made it all the more hilarious! It looks like some really weird love triangle is in store, but maybe not. You could surprise me and they both die in the next chapter or something. But I mean, he had clown make up on! So funny! And giving the girl "the eye times infinity"... classic! I love it!
GrannyP 2008-07-02 ch 1,	abuseMerde equals good luck in clown language! Oh, how clever! Why is there something so entertaining about a circus and clowns that has be giggling for no reason as I read this? It's strange! But this fascinates me. I especially liked the part where he was explaining what was happening and mixed in with his thoughts about himself... he's going to kill himself on his 21st birthday? What the...?
Rizzy 2007-11-24 ch 1,	abuseI really enjoy your sense of humor ^^ I love the characters already and I cant wait for the next chapter!
Aleksy Lorraine 2007-11-23 ch 3,	abuseYayness! You're back! :D I want to give Ethan a hug; very badly. That is all... ...not really. While I do want to cheer poor Ethan up, I am enjoying his bleak misanthropic quips. This one seemed a little choppy, but still awesome. I am, however, very happy happy he was able to get that clown makeup off. :D PLEASE WRITE MORE LEST I SHOULD DIE!
Jack Argyle 2007-10-21 ch 2,	abuseHey. When I'm envisioning this story in my head it's got a very grey colour palette. Yep, I've decided to start my review like that. The gears operating in your head must spin in reverse because again you've managed to create these sur-realistic characters. Thinking about Ethan's chest just makes me feel ghzhrd bur. I hate the thought of strange chest cavities. Oh and congratulations on these lines: "Puck’s left eye bulges something fierce. It frightens little children" "the American dream: smash your head repetitively for minimum wage" "Clown syndrome" Especially that last one. Oh and if I haven't mentioned it yet I am enjoying this. I love its whole mopey autumney feel. That is all.
dangelicessence 2007-10-20 ch 1,	abuseThis is wonderfully written, like all of your stuff but I'm going to have to tell you that I can't read this. Clowns(even ones who aren't funny) scare me. I'm serious just the thought of them freak me out. Sorry. But good luck with this anyway. And I hope Ethan cheers up.
Aleksy Lorraine 2007-10-20 ch 2,	abuseYAY! I HAVE BEEN SATED! I don't think your romance was forced at all. I mean, it seemed to me that he was reaching out to females in general because his time is, ahem, limited (WHICH I AM UPSET ABOUT!WAA!). I'm not sure if that's what you were going for, but that's the way it seemed and it seemed very well. Mhm. I want to give Ethan a hug. And then probably molest him. :D Just on principle, ya know? Hmm, maybe I'm just a sucker for tall, downtrodden individuals. In all seriousness I'm enjoying this a lot and I'm more and more curious to see what happens! I can't wait to hear about Edgar and Edward. And if Gretyl does indeed come back. Though I'm not sure I'd like a 'convention' yuppy romance. Hopefully you know what I mean, though it's definitely up to you! And don't worry, we love you too! :D
Aleksy Lorraine 2007-10-18 ch 1,	abuseI LOVE THIS! I LOVE YOU! I can't believe I didn't check this out sooner! I REALLY like this story. I don't think I've ever read anything quite like it. On one hand there are a lot of really funny beats. But it also makes me sad, because, like, there's clowns in it. XP The part where you alluded to his chest deformity truly tugged at my heart strings. This whole chapter was brilliant, especially the juxtaposition on stage where he was explaining his plans and also trapezing through this, uh, facade. I really hope you update soon! PLEASE?
Leinnansidhe 2007-10-16 ch 1,	abuseYAY. CIRCUS STORY. There's a defecit of good ones, I find. But this immediately caught my attention. I like all the extra information you put in there. It feels like I'm talking to a clown expert. Or, uh... something. But a cool one. And not that I can say a lot because I do this all the time, but just watch your use of 'there', 'their' and 'they're'. It's a tiny thing, and not exactly a huge issue. (I'm like, the Queen of Typos). I love Ethan already. "One day I’ll go telltale heart on his **." I laughed, SO HARD (and made anyone sitting near me give me odd looks). Nicely done. Poe references are awesome. And "Merde." Everything sounds better in French. Bwaha~

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