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| Alexandria Smith 2008-03-11 ch 1,  | abuseWow, this one has such strong emotion and power through these simple, every day words. Excellent job, I can't find a thing to critique. Love it. Alexandria Smith |
| simpleplan13 2007-12-19 ch 1, | abuseI like this a lot the way you describe imperfection is awesome.. beautiful imagery.. the only thing is in the beginning you started with all beautiful then how the last two werent and then you switched to alternating good and bad of the same thing every other line... that kinda threw me off, but that might just be me.. anyhow great piece |
| AshleyElizabethx3 2007-12-16 ch 1, | abusei really liked how you pulled this off and put in a flowing rhyme scheme. it had a great message about how even imperfect things are beautiful. |
| Litheral 2007-11-15 ch 1, | abuseWell, your title does do your poem justice. It also seems I am not in the majority when I say the bolding is distracting. It isn't necessary for your words to be bold. It is my view, if the work is good, let the words, and not the style of what is written, speak for itself. On a lighter note, your imagery is very beautiful. I love the waves of color you put into this. Lots of variety in colors, texture, and scenes. They just brighten up the mood. Lovely inspiring imagery. |
| Needa S 2007-11-07 ch 1, | abuseBeautifully done! Awesome work. Write on and God Bless! |
| LittleDoe 2007-10-30 ch 1, | abuseA beautiful poem, nice flow, creative imagery, and a clear, consise, point. I really like how you made some of the words bold. Nice work. God bless you! ~LittleDoe |
| The Maltese Falcon 2007-10-10 ch 1, | abuseKath, this is beautifully expressed and loved the way you highlighted those key words there - nice effect. If i can comment maybe some commas/periods at the end of some lines to break some sentences...like after 'hatch' and after 'grass'? Not too sure about the last lines about the ocean waves/hills as they don't seem to reflect the perfection theme or maybe i didn't get that. Nice write! ~Norman |