Firstly, I want to apologize. I completely forgot to check this out and I am so so so so sorry I didn't. I feel so bad right now. Luckily I saved your e-mail and was able to read it eventually. It was absolutly fabulous! Very descriptive and cool. One thing you could describe more is her apartment, because when I tried to imagine it I saw a bed. Other than that, it was completely perfect. Again, so sorry!

Brilliant piece of writing, this one! Honestly, I like your style and how you write it. You're very descriptive and this reminds me of a gothic melodrama style because you tend to focus on small parts of details which makes the whole thing imaginable, so I'd suggest that you continue doing that. It's a rare trait among authors nowadays, take my word for it.

The story itself is great, but perhaps you would want to write a bit more about Mira and what her character is in general. Write some rethorical questions to make the reader guess her feelings, make them feel a bit more attatched to your character.

Keep on writing and improving! I really do like your style of writing, so good luck with the Creative Writing project.

Skylight Rinoa.