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| springfiry 2008-02-08 ch 6,  | abuseReally enjoying this story , but its too short in my opinion. And i think more detailed backgrounds on everyone? |
| Jevanminx 2008-02-05 ch 6, | abuseA strange yet cool chapter, I liked it and it had good bits of humour cant wait for more. JM |
| menace in training 2008-02-02 ch 6, | abusei like this story alot, you've got lottie's character down to an art! your writing sounds exactly like a good friend of mine! :P keep writing, and the good work |
| hopelessromantic444 2008-02-01 ch 6, | abuseaww great chapter =) |
| beccabrighteyes 2008-02-01 ch 6, | abuseStupid stupid girl. Isn't it obvious that the bad boy would totally be the better bet. Much less likely to publicly humiliate you. Good story. |
| mistress tee 2008-01-09 ch 5, | abuseso... this story rocks. I can't wait to hear more! |
| I Quoth Nevermore 2008-01-09 ch 5, | abuseGreat update. I'm glad you're going down the path to have Lottie sort-of like Jake instead of James the Bad Boy. Most authors make their leading girl go for the bad boys, so it's getting tiring. But it's just refreshing to see that at least for now she's into Jake. That may change %_% |
| hopelessromantic444 2008-01-09 ch 5, | abuseawesome chapter =) i loved the makeover lol |
| Jevanminx 2008-01-09 ch 5, | abuseDefinitly party on, that was such a cool way to wake Jake up, it added a brilliant bit to the chapter that broke up the whole length of a make over. Cant wait for more. JM |
| Midnight Owl 2007-11-24 ch 4, | abuseWONDERFUL. so funny. I love Lottie, and I frankly hope she gets the hell out of high school unscathed. I'm glad you threw in the Girl Makeover scene... it's so essential to a cheesy teen drama. Hopefully Lottie kicks up a fuss about that. She really should just tell the boys she knows about the bet :) The only constructive "criticism" of sorts I can give you is really a very selfish one. I would love to read longer chapteres :) |
| curator 2007-11-21 ch 4, | abuseLOL the story's going great. There are a few grammar mistakes though. I think you get 'then' mixed up with 'than' sometimes, but other than that, it's all cool...Cheers! |
| jammi 2007-11-19 ch 4, | abuseHahahah, her mom is like a hypocondriac but she projects it onto her family, nice. Nice use of her mother to showcase Lottie's relationship with Kaya instead of her explaining it herself. I like Hy, hahah, she's amusing. |
| SuperCUTEJensen 2007-11-19 ch 4, | abusegreat chapter...cant wait to see what happens next... |
| woodstock1969 2007-11-19 ch 4, | abuseHey! Like I mentioned earlier, great story so far! Wow, I thought my mother was awkward and embarassing... Lottie's mother just takes the cake. Update soon! By the way, your character development is wonderful! |
| woodstock1969 2007-11-19 ch 1, | abuseHey! I ususally would have waited until the latest chapter to review, but this was just too good! I love your writing style - creative, slightly sarcastic, gramatically correct, etc. There were so many little phrases and lines in this chapter that absolutely cracked me up, for instance, the Spaghetti-o's line. Hilarious. On to the next chapter! |