omg! amazingness! i absolutely love this. are you a twin? im just wondering cuz you write a lot about them. lol i love twins, there were these to guys (twins duh)...Mark and Mike. they were adorable. They always dressed alike and always did things together and they're 18! i can see little kids doing it but not a lot of older twins would do that. they were so cute! XD

neways i loved this. sad but beautiful.

I can't believe that you're a fan of "The Door Within" series too! I was absolutely crushed when one of the twins died.

Part one almost made me cry, and shudder at the same time. It was sort of like a righteous fury sort of tears...like when time slows down and all you want to do is cry, but you can't...(can't really find words to describe feeling...T_T) The ending gave me chills...

Wow...a bit of a timeskip in part two! The memory still hurts, that's totally understandable...I can almost feel the guilt myself. Great reader connection here.

Part three really made my heart wrench, I can't even imagine how Nock must be feeling here...(I would die if I lost one of my brothers...) Wow...this was really deep...

Wonderfully done, left me in yet another sense of awe

~Saira

I like that
Very nicely put.

Heyz Jue!

I don't know really how to read poetry (I can't analyze poetry XP), but I really liked the tone that was going out through this story. I think it would've been nicer if the number of syallabes and the rhthym per line was equal...but that's just my extremely un-artsy and completely poetry-lacking side of me XD.

Once again, you're awesome at rhyming! My favorite part was when you discussed the brother going up into the sky and the stars. It reminded me of Gemini--Castor and Pollux.

Sine cera,
Yumizuki

NICE!

Good story, though the second part seems non-related to the first part, maybe that was on purpose, or I didn't read it well. Anyways, GREAT story in part 1 I LOVED IT! the second though was also good, but I didn't like as much. I still enjoyed it, but I prefered the first part.

Good job as Always Jue!