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| marie ryan 2008-06-06 ch 7, anon. | abuseIn the last chapter you said the husband's name was Karl. In this chapter his name is Kurt. Just a note. So far so good. Good plot. |
| J. H. Loveless 2007-12-02 ch 14,  | abuseHm. Very nice. I wouldn't say that it was an improvement over the earlier chapters, but it was well written nonetheless. My only suggestion would be to deliver more of a lead-up to plot twists, it felt like that news(I'm straying away from specifics, in case someone reads this review before the chapter) came rather suddenly, and the story carried out as if it was one of the lesser details while it was actually quite important. Anyways, good work, keep it up. |
| J. H. Loveless 2007-12-02 ch 12, | abuseVery nice story so far. I thought the beginning was lacking a bit of necessary emotion, but it has picked up since then. At the moment I'm quite pleased with where it's headed, and cannot wait until the 13th chapter. |
| Koinophobia 2007-11-13 ch 9, | abuseThis story is very cool- i like all the details about the wolf pack hierarchies, and I'm intirgued as to all wolf eugenics you've been mentioning...Are we going to find out more about them later? |
| Koinophobia 2007-11-02 ch 5, | abuseYay, more story filled goodness! I really like this- it may just be me, but of the many werewolf/vampire stories out there, most of them are on the side of the vampires, so its nice to find one that takes the werewolves side. Go werewolves! Thank you for story! |
| Comawhite13 2007-11-01 ch 4, | abuseI think you'll find upcoming chapters will explain why I chose to introduce her character so soon after I introduced the idea of her. Also, why they don't escape will be elaborated on in the future... |
| katherine haynes 2007-10-31 ch 4, anon. | abusecool, interesting storyline but i do think that it is too soon to introduce Laelas yet. Not to sound like I'm ragging on your story but if she could get out of the cage, then why not escape? One more question, why wasn't Damien esnt with his new owner? or is he with her already?...that was two questions...huh, well i really like it so far! |
| Koinophobia 2007-10-28 ch 2, | abuseThis is a cool story... you've caught my interest as I was browsing- any chance of an update? |