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| Life In Heaven 2008-03-30 ch 1,  | abuseWow, this was really quite something. I liked the bold/italics/spacing & ect that was going on here. It was unnessciary for a few things, but ultimately it worked well in emphasising words & making the work look niceer. The vocabularly was good, and the haunting numbness was to die for. I think it could have been more emotional/raw/heartbreaking, but besides that I really liked this. :) |
| smile for the sunshine 2008-01-21 ch 1, | abusei loved the imagery in this. beautifully written. good job with this. |
| Broken Fairytales 2007-12-07 ch 1, | abusefantastic, beautiful. You write so honestly which is something rare now. I loved it. Oh, and I wanted to thank you for reviewing my works. I'm sorry that I didn't respond sooner! -Sapphire |
| painting andromeda 2007-11-14 ch 1, | abuseThis is raw. A photograph of the truth pixelized by words. Beautiful. Stephen |
| RaindropsOnBlackRoses 2007-10-29 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was really good. I loved how mysterious it was and kinda creepy! :) |
| Taltush/MeiMei 2007-10-29 ch 1, | abuseYour stuff seriously creeps me out. Like, seriously. And there's always something so frightening about that creep level, because even though I'm an old-fashioned kid, I still read these terrifying poems (but oh so good!). And it's so confusing and weird and... I can't even properly comment, see? What are the lyrics? |
| Chidori Nadare 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abuseI love the imagery and the dangerous emotion feeling in this. I'm always impressed by your work. Great job. -C.N |
| Stella Grimshaw. 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abuseI am absolutely in love with your work. The format of it is so so so refreshing and I loved the use of all your words. I can't wait for more. |
| felicia13 2007-10-19 ch 1, | abuseShockingly despondent. I love the imagry floating through this (it's like one depressed self-portrait) and I love the italicized/bolded pieces. Simply amazing. Felicia. |
| skitly 2007-10-18 ch 1, | abuseThat was so good, one of my favourite ones of yours so far, really beautifuly done xx |
| the face in the window 2007-10-17 ch 1, | abuseThere's so much...soul...in this. So much emotion. It's flawless. Rowan. |
| whispered something profoun... 2007-10-13 ch 1, | abusehaha i write poems about the imaginary girl all the time. :)...maybe she isnt as imaginary as i like to thing...this was very angsty in a lovely way that made me want to read all the words on the line, not just the concept behind them. its very well written. |
| painted.music 2007-10-12 ch 1, | abusekonnichi wa Such a heartbreaking piece! Poetic and dangerous and absolutely beautiful! I think you should break up "(she wants to join him so badly but refuses to give him the satisfaction of knowing she can't live without him)" into two or more lines -- it's too much for one and sort of makes the poem look a bit unbalanced if that makes sense. Other than that -- utter beauty! Zaijen -Shan- |
| dress her up in fairytales 2007-10-12 ch 1, | abusei love blessthefall. ♥ "but she secretly wants someone, anyone to call her out on all her lies" this is painfully beautiful ... especially if it's true. |
| kloun mannequin 2007-10-12 ch 1, | abusethat's sad, I think a lot of people could relate to this 'cause there were so many times we have some problem but nobody cares... well, the poem is good. |