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Lucy-the-bookworm 2008-07-15 ch 20,	abuseI absolutly loved this story! Katrina and Michael are great together. I was listening to the song I'll Stand By You during the last part of the story and it really seemed to go with it. I almost cried with happiness that they figured out how much they meant to each other.
theLouvre 2008-07-09 ch 20,	abuseoh this story was wonderful! i cannot tell you how much i enjoyed it! it really gives off a little, umm, how must i call it?...oh yes, "umph!" - and that's in the good way. i'm certainly adding this to my favourites. wonderful job!
Written 2007-12-13 ch 20,	abusethis story is absolutely brill. I love the way they really grow together, you know what I mean? Thank you for writing this!
wildwood 2007-12-06 ch 20,	abuseI really liked your story and your plot, it was very well written! A tip to improve - perhaps re-check on your grammar and spelling in places, and maybe you could use a bit more development on the characters. But it was a really good story, and I thoroughly enjoyed it - well done!
ANGEL992210 2007-11-30 ch 1,	abuseThis is really good.
cowgirl11963 2007-10-28 ch 20,	abuseHello my name is Deborah and this is my first story Ihave read here on fan fiction. And i wanted to let you know that Ireally enjoyed your story ,And I really hope you will write more chapters.Thanks,Deborah wellgood luck to you! :)
Amaia-Lori 2007-10-22 ch 20,	abuseI enjoy the basic storyline and with some work, the characters would be amazing. Try to work on adding details within your writing; help others to see the story as you see it in your mind because I can already tell you have great potential. Keep writing and please keep sharing.
persephoneal naiad 2007-10-22 ch 20,	abuseAw! This was such a sweet story, and even if the grammar was slightly distorted in places, I really loved the idea. And considering some of your word choice, you have blatant potential!
Seina 2007-10-17 ch 1,	abuseInteresting plotline, I'm intrigued, but it needs some cleaning up. You have some tense changes in the first half of the chapter were distracting; and transitions could be improved too...she went from suicidal to witty pretty quickly... good ideas though. I want to read more. And I shall!
Georgiana 2007-10-15 ch 12,	abuseAhh...:) I don't really know... This chapter was just sweet. It made me smile:) The story of Juanita was touching and sad... I feel sorry for Michael, but at least he has got Katrina now...:) You write truly capturing. This story is realistic, yet not stiff with the propriety of the time. You convey feeling in an enthralling way when you write. =) I'm sorry, but the bed is beckoning. Looking forward to your next chapter, Toodleoo for now, Georgiana=D
Georgiana 2007-10-15 ch 11,	abuseHow humiliating! Doesn't Katrina own ANY scruples AT ALL?!! Oh, well... I guess it turned out all right...=D Yes... A visitor... Interesting...:D Yes. Moving on to the next chapter... Mysterious John O'Grady... here I come!
Georgiana 2007-10-15 ch 10,	abuseThey kissed! Toothy grin Well... Michael's gotta stop living in the past, though I see where he is coming from... I hope we will see more of the Irish war for independence. Scratch that. I REALLY hope we will see more of the Irish war for independence. I think you reasoned Michael's thinking very well. The only reason why I am so openly and passionately against his way of thinking is because YOU MADE ME. That's right. You know, if I read a good story that is well written, I FEEL. I care about the characters so much I actively rip my hair out and chew my fingernails to bits as I read. If the story didn't touch me at all, I wouldn't care one way or another. So you should take it as a compliment that I think Michael is stupid for thinking about Juanita while kissing Katrina. REAL STUPID. (Although his was a very realistic response.)
Georgiana 2007-10-15 ch 9,	abuseAh, the alarm! The tension! The excitement! The fear gripping my heart! The ice-cold blood coursing through my veins as I read this! The beautiful wording that makes the moment come to life! The hairs that are standing on end on my back! The desperate urge to know what will happen next! Thank God you have posted the next chapter!
Georgiana 2007-10-15 ch 8,	abuseAh! The romance is finally blooming!=D Their first awkward moment... let's mark the date! This is big:) My only problem, however... I guess you've painted Micheal into a more fatherly figure than a romantic one... It justs feels a little weird with them getting all lovey-dovey now...? I don't know. Maybe you should just make him shave his face. You mentioned in the the first chapter that he was 'bearded'... I kind of picture him with a curly, blond Santa Clause-shaped beard... =§ Maybe you could describe him being more younger-looking so I don't feel so queasy? I'm sorry...=§ ? Okay... I guess I exaggerated a little... And this is truly amazingly written, so don't worry about that. And maybe Michael's 'beardedness' sets him apart from the classic hero...?
faery tragedy 2007-10-13 ch 6,	abuseI'm enjoying the story; I think it owns a lot of potential. But I have two criticisms: Some of your sentences are a little awkward, maybe because they're long or start out with prep. phrases. Also, I don't think it's necessary to use a bunch of other verbs in place of said all the time...it makes it flow unevenly. Using said is not boring, but I think the more descriptive verbs should be sprinkled it for emphasis, and not that common. Anyway, good luck! *faery tragedy

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