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| Twilight Starr 2007-11-04 ch 1, | abuseGreat story. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| rust phoenix 2007-10-19 ch 1, | abuseI like it. I've never read anything quite like this, so definitely points for originality. Even though the topic is common, you show it in a very unique way. It's very poetic, I like the variation in the language you use and the juxtaposition of concepts. You've got talent, keep writing! I've added you to author alerts. |
| EnigmaticArsenic 2007-10-14 ch 1, | abuseMy favorite season. Lovely, lovely as always. And this, the best line: "You breathe silently," the seasons whisper. Spring and Summer play like children, trading a love that never fades; Winter tosses her porcelain hair, gazes into a pool of ice, admires her own shimmering deportment. "... While Autumn gasps and struggles, too warm to die, too cold to blossom, a victim to her own strangulation." It's been such a strange and fickle autumn though, like it can't decide whether it wants to remain summer or not so it just teeters on the edge. We've only had a handful of days that have truly felt like fall so far. :( I hear it's supposed to be a very mild winter though. |
| loveshouldnthurt 2007-10-12 ch 1, | abusei love the descriptions they really give you an entire story. "You breathe silently," the seasons whisper is a great line by the way. |