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| Therese Delacoeur 2007-10-17 ch 1,  | abuseWow... I like this. Male slash, isn't that what y'all call it? It's interesting and the love interest was unexpected because of that. Very well written and well paced. The bit of comic relief in the form of the ransom note made me giggle, very well placed! A couple of questions: how did they know that Eirikr was the bit of Lev's heart? Also, it seemed in a couple places that Lev had various emotions and opinions of his own. I would've expected a boy like that to be more...aloof, or maybe dull. This seems to be a Middle Ages European-based story. Did they have divorces back then? Some of your vernacular was a bit dated: the "What now?!" (while hilarious!) is most definately a more recent than this timeline would suggest. Actually, I had a bit of trouble placing the story time-wise in the beginning. From the summary and a bit in the beginning, it almost seemed that Eirikr was a modern painter and Lev was a prince that had appeared from his imagination. I eventually got it, though, so it must just be a thick-headed moment on my part. I loved the fact that Gauthier was Eirikr's father! Totally unexpected, though now that I think about it, it was foreshadowed with the "would you care about meeting your parents?" questions. (Another duh moment, I think...:) ) You introduce a couple characters in the beginning, like the knight and a kitten. Is there more to the knight than we hear? Why did Lev save the kitten, and why was he there to begin with? Overall, fantastic story! It's so original and refreshing, and it's so well written. It was entertaining and engaging. ... Sorry, I'll stop blathering. But really, great job! Two thumbs and eight fingers up! ;) |