I love this poem, i'm not sure what it is. It's so much like an e e cummings poem (he is my favorite). I like to emulate him a little in my writing. You have beautifully captured everything that you set out to. Simply Marvelous.

p.s. thank you for the comment, i would love for you to read more.

xavier

i really love all of the descriptions and the image and feeling combined is really powerful, though confusing at first. great job.