Alrighty then i liked it a lot as a soon-to-be yaoi (gay!)_ style writer i enjoyed the unexpected outcome =D it was enlightening and somehing that probbaly Wont happen to me sometime soon anyways i liked it short hot and Unexpected 8/10

just some minor criticism, obviously take it or leave it. grammatically, it's "Might have/ could have/ would have" not "might of/ would of/ could of..." 'have done/having been done/ had done' is English, past tense. also, i think you should tighten up the "stream-of-consciousness" interludes from Marcus since sometimes they work and sometimes they're annoying or out-of-place. maybe make them in his voice, to keep them sounding like interruptions from the character.
on the plus side, i'm amazed that you cut out the sex. that takes guts and maturity since everyone and their fangrl seems to want to write bad smut for no reason. it keeps the whole thing in a higher tone. also, it's a little sad for Chris, since he's the sympathetic character (to me anyway).

well, that was odd, but I liked it. Very ego boosting indeed...

COOL!