critique - if you'd stretched out the story a bit it would've been more... realistic(?)
praise-aww, romance

Ah, kawaii ne. It's very light but heartwarming. Gets you feeling all giddy inside. Lol. Nice job, swee-chan!

awe! KAWAI!
*swoon. swoon. swoon.*
absolutely adorable! I love this! So dramatic, its almost sickening how much shmuck you put into this. =D i. love. this.
*faves.*

-miku :glomp:

salut, c'est MistyRose14! i love the tone that the main character had as she told the story - it was very down-to-earth, which made it amusing. sorry, i don't have lots of reading time anymore...but i'll add this to my c2, and i'd like to add you as a staff member, if that's okay. bon travail!

hehe,,kawai...
Just reading at this can make me imagine the real manga comic . . . thing...
wa..if you can draw manga,,you should make this story,,haha then sell it (to your friends around you, earn a little cash) or publish it in a magazine or something..

I like the fact that Maki is still in love with Ryu (eventhough she never admit him)and her heart was melt when she knew Ryu is still in love with her,

oh,and thanks for reading my story,,=)

I saw your story. It's very good! Um...I'm sorry to ask but...if you don't mind, would you like to see my story? It's called TCR (The Catalyst's Rebellion). Crossover is on hiatus but you're welcome to read that too. I might start another story soon. Would you like to see? Sorry to ask if you have a busy schedule on you. I read some shoujo manga too.

Cute, short story.

Good luck with writing, this story, and life.

Have an excellent day.

~Twilight Starr~