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| simpleplan13 2008-02-14 ch 1,  | abuseinteresting... I like it a lot.. it makes a really great point and I love the phrase "ungrateful dead".. One thing the two lines and the world around them dies/and the ungrateful dead.. I wouldnt use and to start both lines it seemed a bit repetitive...other than that really great piece |
| blueroseofice 2007-10-28 ch 1, | abuseI like the format of this poem and the flow of it. Also nothing is to political if its the truth. Maybe if politicians were actually truthful there wouldn't be a need for this poem. I really like it! Never stop writting! ~EM |
| hiro0911 2007-10-26 ch 1, | abusechildren fighting wars and the world around them dies - i liked this line in particular |
| Sexy vampirechick 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseSounds like a song.I like your contrasts in the poem,it's cool,yet truthful.Very well done. |