interesting... I like it a lot.. it makes a really great point and I love the phrase "ungrateful dead".. One thing the two lines and the world around them dies/and the ungrateful dead.. I wouldnt use and to start both lines it seemed a bit repetitive...other than that really great piece

I like the format of this poem and the flow of it. Also nothing is to political if its the truth. Maybe if politicians were actually truthful there wouldn't be a need for this poem. I really like it! Never stop writting!

EM

children fighting wars and the world around them dies - i liked this line in particular

Sounds like a song.I like your contrasts in the poem,it's cool,yet well done.