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| purplepants 2007-10-16 ch 1,  | abusei feel like this is kind of cliche in the sense that "pitter patter" is as over used as " quiet enough to hear a pin drop" sorta thing. i also feel like the wording at the end seemed a bit forced and didn't really flow properly. but i really liked the middle section, it gave me a good sense of midnight. good job :] |