Reviews for The Rose of Whitekeep

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Pixiepie 2008-07-24 ch 10, anon.	abuseAlthough it has been many years since I was a teen-aged girl, I must admit I enjoyed this hilariously off-beat story. I have never read so many run-on sentences. But I totally believe Tiff talks just like that. Thanks for the smiles.
T.J.WIBBS08 2008-06-07 ch 2,	abuseGreat captivating story! could you please review mine! It is: The Secrets of the Lost Worlds Prologue!! Please PLEASE REVIEW! I would really appreciate it!
Death Walks Alone 2008-05-12 ch 5,	abuseI think my favorite part so far has been the seamstressosity. Words like that make me giggle. >< Though the song of Bri'tanni is close runner-up. How on earth did you think of all this? The plot's appropriately transparent, though, isn't it? I wonder, though, is Eldari going to be turned by Tiff's "charm and kindness"? Very funny, very clever. I'm off to read the next chapter!
Death Walks Alone 2008-05-12 ch 3,	abuseI can't see elves playing "I Spy"...huh. Let's see...still slightly scared that you do this so well. And I'm not sure what to say, except that I think it's well done. (I may start reviewing every other chapter, so you don't get bored.) Surely she isn't naïve enough to think all elves are good? I'm curious about how you're going to play this out. I just realized something! I ought to leave a fanfic review. Ooh...that sounds like so much fun, I just might.
Death Walks Alone 2008-05-12 ch 2,	abuseMy first thought reading this is: Should I be scared that you can write a girl's fanfic so well? It keeps making me laugh, because of its cliche awfulness. You leave some of the contractions uncontracted, so it sounds a bit stiff. I don't know if that's what you're going for or not, but it's the only thing not great that I can find. Onward!
Inarra Lake 2008-02-04 ch 10,	abuseI think you may have failed at making this story terrible. If you want, I can point out the incredibly creative and imaginative phrases and youcan snip them out and THEN it will be an utterly terribly written fanfiction. Good luck with the rest of your works.
Inarra Lake 2008-02-04 ch 9,	abuseThe dress was a masterpiece of daunting severity. It made mountains look silly and underdressed. Sheer granite cliffs and bottomless canyons would certainly have said, had they seen it, “Well, I didn’t know we were supposed to look nice for this.” Ball-gowns and eveningwear felt a sudden and inexplicable urge to hide in corners when it passed. Tuxedoes kept their impure thoughts to themselves. Look, can you stop slipping these incredibly imaginative descriptions in here, it's making this story far too enjoyable.
Inarra Lake 2008-02-04 ch 7,	abuse"A few strains of music, a shy smile or two, and suddenly people are moving in ways they would never admit to during the dull rush of the day. The air feels softer, sweeter, and the stars lean in like expectant lovers; blushes blazing." It's a fantastic fangiction parody, but little bits of yourself are pushed in, hiding behind the hilarity, popping out every so often to say hello. That bit there sounds too nice for Oh-em-gee Tiff to be thinking it, lol, But it works. It's a breath of fresh air.
Inarra Lake 2008-02-03 ch 5,	abuse“And she shall shine as she falls from the sky, her radiant tresses flailing in the winds over Ellidell. Morning birds will sing her praises as they serenade the dawn. Even though she is just barely turned a woman she is every bit the savior that this world requires. Also she is beautiful. Did I mention that?” “A destined man unaware of his charm, with tawny eyes and a prince’s heart beneath scholar’s robes shall guide her true with beautiful sacrifice and the purest love shining in his blue eyes. They were blue in the first verse, right? No. Tawny. That doesn’t sound right either. They were green!” Oh lord. I couldn't even finish it, I was laughing so hard. :D And i think that secretly, you are hot for Andar. Laughs uncontrollably I am in love with the Author's Notes. They have made my day. I'm really weird aren't I? Sending you all these weird things in my reviews? Yeah, I know I am, but hey, I'm allowed to be weird sometimes right?
Sabraeal 2007-10-28 ch 10,	abuseI'm so sad this story is over, because I'm a gigantic review whore, and this is like one big CoT love letter. So, I basically heart you. 1.) I kinda laughed when you handwaved Muirinn and House Muirdhin away. THERE IS NO EXISTING ROYAL FAMILY, NOPE. But it left room for Tiff to totally take over, so yeah. 2.) The Cinderella reference is love. 3.)Oh Gavin. He's probably so dumb bricks won't hang out with him for lack of good conversation. All in all, I am quite enamored with this story. I will totally write you the exchange piece soon (I'll take a stab at the Jarod bit, because i might be able to finish that before I get my Avia notes from home). And yes, I totally demand a sequel. About Brittany. And maybe dark elves. And the Aillil children. :P
Sabraeal 2007-10-28 ch 9,	abuse1.) Vampires is totally the singular form. Yup. Also, there is totally always vampires in fangirl stories. I'm suprised everyone wasn't a vampires and that at least two guys weren't in love with each other. I actually hope one day there is a HORRIBLY BAD FANFIC with all the Dark Elves as Vampire. And they angst. A LOT. I would laugh. And Arduus would totally be all angsty until some human girl named Brittany made it ALL BETTERS. 2.) Tiff trying to do magic on purpose to change into something else to get away is possibly the saddest thing in this story. I actually legit feel bad for her. 3.) AHAHAH. PANDA FACE. But yes, Tiff thinking the guard was going to help her is awesome. Simply awesome. And the dress is the best thing ever. CUz you know, that's gonna win the day. 4.) "The dress was a masterpiece of daunting severity. It made mountains look silly and underdressed. Sheer granite cliffs and bottomless canyons would certainly have said, had they seen it, “Well, I didn’t know we were supposed to look nice for this.” Ball-gowns and eveningwear felt a sudden and inexplicable urge to hide in corners when it passed. Tuxedoes kept their impure thoughts to themselves." Um yeah. AWESOME. 5.) "You could let me go because that would be sporting you horrid old crone." I have to say, Tiff has grown on me. Like some sort of commensalistic fungi. Really. I love her a lot. 6.) I wish she actually got out skank at the end. I would have laughed and laughed. 7.) hahah, it's so you that he only kissed her on the forehead. If a fangirl had written this story, they would have MADE OUT, and it would have been MAGIC, as it was Tiff's FIRST KISS. And their souls touched. And things. THE END. Anyway, I love this story like burning.
Sword On Fire/Jazmin Firewi... 2007-10-28 ch 10, anon.	abuseAww, it's over! Too bad. This was the perfect mix of Mary-Sue horribleness and Terry Pratchet-like satire. Awesome job, Batman.
Rachel McMaster 2007-10-26 ch 5,	abuseLol! I love this story, especially because I just returned from a writer's camp, where I was surrounded by Tiffs. While I don't read a lot of fanfiction myself, I loved your take on it! My favorite bit would probably be the Freudian slips; while Tiff is a Mary Sue, she's also a realistic and lovable Mary Sue. The story gets a bit slow in Chapter 2, but that maybe just in comparison to the action of Chapter 1. I would also recommend rationing the run-on sentences, because while they're fantastic (and I love how the elves can only respond with "um")they're slightly overused. I haven't finished it yet, but I'll definitely be coming back! -R
Sabraeal 2007-10-24 ch 8,	abuse1.) Milksop is an awesome word. I'm not entirely sure that Andar would use it (Maryias might call him such though), but it fits Tiff's motif. 2.) Lol, girlchat. It spans across worlds. 3.) I still want to throttle Mal'issa. 4.) Oh the fanfic. It is so awesome yet I totally cringe - there is nothing more disturbing than RPF'ing historical figures. 5.) And of course, Tiff is arrested when obviously Mal'issa (who has the leading man under her evil spell!) is the evil one. I've almost missed bad fanfic written by thirteen year olds (pretending to be 16)
Sabraeal 2007-10-24 ch 7,	abuse1.) Aww, Andar angst. It's the new black among fangirls. 2.) Turien's awesome obliviousness and Eldari'd line of suitors make me glee. 3.) I just want to throttle Mal'issa. I really do. 4.) "you are going to stand in a corner sipping expensive wine and sulking because, really, you’re very well suited to that." this is something every girl wants to say at least once in her life. 5.) Andar is so awkward. It is delightful.

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