First - thanks for your honesty in commenting on my poem. I truly appreciate it!

Second - I really love this. I've read through most of your stuff, but this one really stands out for me. That first line catches your attention right away. The whole thing is beautifully worded, but when actually read and absorbed for what the words mean, is quite sad. I like a poem you have to read more than once to get a feel for. So well done.

I think you've improved as well.
I see more maturity in your writing than in the past, but it's still angsty as hell. Which is your forte, and its wonderful.

Bursting into a sunset of tears is a great image.

i love the ending but i don't how the first two sections are related, even if they are loosely connected, i feel like it would be more powerful with a direct connection. the opening is really strong and i like the imagery a lot. nice job :]