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| Shining Silver Phoenix 2007-10-28 ch 4,  | abuseNice! Good chapter! |
| Melissa Norvell 2007-10-26 ch 4, | abuseThis is an interesting read (and this is coming from someone who is an aspiring manga-ka herself and nearly got something published in an anime magazine) I can picture the characters semi-clearly. It's a good plot and quite interesting. Hardly the cliche' love story here. However, don't forget to add more description. As readers, we don't know what your characters and their surroundings look like,or their actions and movements so its up to you as an author to provide description in order for us to picture things more clearly. Other then that one flaw, I love it and I'll be back next week! In the mean time, if you're looking for a good read then feel free to check out some of my works. |
| Torin-san 2007-10-25 ch 4, | abusewow, sakura's kinda lik me... i'm also a mangaka wannabe (just can't draw the comic...) i also hav kinda a kei-kun too but we're not on comfortable grounds it started with this guy that seem to be so similar to raito so i kept on telling my friends how KIRA lik he was and thus the KIRA theory was made and of course even with my slow but random approach he started to get freak out (mainly becuz he didn't know me or about death note at the time) this is reason is that he could hav lost his memories if he gave up the death note and then i notice how interesting he looked lik with these two other guys so i thought wouldn't it be cool if i put them in a manga as a group and then i decided to make every character in my manga, a person from my whole 8th grade year (my school was small so less than 200?) so if i had the time and confidence ask people a random question(s) and with the guy being my main character, i got/had to ask lots of question unlik kei he actually wants to be away from me TT_TT now in high school his 'i think ur weird' look is always on when he sees me and one time he had the nerve to try to run away from me my friend thought it was funny but she said u wouldn't if someone was yelling and running at them and those two guys i mention earlier r straight but they act so gay! they're so friendly touchy and preverted in the head and one of them is so girly! XD so sorry for this long rantingish review that had barely nothing with to do with this story so luv it and uPDATE! |
| Fred the ferret is DEAD 2007-10-24 ch 4, | abuselol awesme story keep it up! |
| jaPaneRa 2007-10-23 ch 3, | abuse,.wah!! dis is it,..hehehe i knew it im going to love this story,..wah,..the scene about the tripping hahaha d best,.. |
| jaPaneRa 2007-10-23 ch 2, | abuse,.wahehe sakura sure is stupid sometimes,..hey wait y does d guy want to get closer w/ sakura,..hmm i smell something fishy,..haha this chapter makes me laf,..hahah it is really funny |
| jaPaneRa 2007-10-23 ch 1, | abuse,.waheheh dis is a gud start hmp,.i can relate 2 sakura coz sumtyms i fid myself talkin alone,..hahah *creppy*enweyz i hope u cotinue writing,..hahah love it.. |
| Shining Silver Phoenix 2007-10-20 ch 3, | abuseAnother great chapter! Keep up the good work! |
| Shining Silver Phoenix 2007-10-17 ch 2, | abuseCool again! Hehe. I'm sorry to ask but have you been reading my story? Sorry to ask. I feel weird. But this story's good! |
| Shining Silver Phoenix 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseWow! Very cool! Another good one-shot! ^_^ |