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lilylupin7
2008-07-02
ch 2,
abuseOhh *shiny* I like this alternate version of Firebird. Especially with a sulky, lovely, adorable Wolf
Elkica
2008-05-07
ch 2,
abuseThe flow of the story at the beginning is slow, but strong and it easy to identify with your main character ( is trying to gave you a constructive criticism). I loved the epilogue, it made me giggle.
x-princessa-temnoti-x
2008-02-23
ch 2,
abuseSquee! I remember this story! It was one of a whole bunch of fairy tales on CDs and they were in Chinese. Was it a wolf though? I don't remember that. I think I remember golden apples. No, something to do with bars and such. Anyhow. Very nice. I like Helen!
renru-no-ren
2008-02-13
ch 1,
abuseKayoot! I thoroughly approve! It feels like a one shot, but there's still more to come! That's a pleasant surprise ^_^
Marasmine
2007-12-11
ch 1, anon.
abuseThat was fantastic. I followed a link from Maderr's journal. You have made Ivan a wonderful, real character. The worries and doubts in the final scene were perfect. As was the ending.

I did spot a couple of typos towards the beginning - Ivan is Ian in one - but otherwise it was beautifully written and expressed.
shakes kinder pinguy
2007-11-12
ch 2,
abuseI really liked this story, it was quite fun :D
Thank you for writing ! ^_^
Kilian
2007-10-26
ch 2,
abuseSo cute! But I don't agree with you, Andrei act more like a brother toward Helen than Ivan :P
Manila Keranu
2007-10-26
ch 2,
abuseShiny! ^_^
Ivan is sweet and funny, and Andrei is simply awesome. Helen made me laugh, though she seems a bit unstable...

What's with the beheading thing in fairytales anyway? You did it very nicely - Ivan's grief felt very real, and that he trusted Andrei enough to actually do it.

The only thing I'd like to point out is that your scene breaks were a bit hard to spot - all paragraphs are separated by a single blank line, and the scene changed had nothing else to mark them as such. I could still tell they were scene changes, but marking them a little clearer might read easier.

The epilogue explained a few things yes, as well as being very funny. Two husbands for Helen, eh? How'd that happen? ^_^

Now I want to finish my retelling of the legend of Deirdre nd get started on that black horse fairytale that's been bugging me XD
exancientgod
2007-10-19
ch 1,
abuse[squees quietly and melts into a puddle of happy-goo] This was all sorts of awsome, and Ivan and Andrei are love. ^_^

Also, yey for rewritten fairytales.
Kilian
2007-10-19
ch 1,
abuseThis fairytall was amazing. Way better than the original one. And the wolf was just grandiose and the princess too. And there isn't one single thing that you chould change (in my opinion).
Escagirl
2007-10-19
ch 1,
abuseAws, it's so cute and fluffy! Go Ivan and Andrei!
rose red
2007-10-19
ch 1, anon.
abuseA nice story! I like the tale itself very much from my childhood (my mother tongue is Russian) and I am delighted to see it rewritten in such wonderfull way! Helen is funny, the wolf is startling and Ivan is very loveble.

My only problem - if the wolf's form as Helen were only illusion, how he managed to function before asking for divorce? If he cannot even untie the ropes for Ivan, how could he pretend to be human?
dyoklako
2007-10-19
ch 1, anon.
abusegot here from maderr's rec over at her lj. this is a sweet re-telling of the russian fairy tale and i like it for all its snarkiness and romance (gasp!there is?!). seriously it is a wonderfully narrated story. thank you for writing and sharing it with us. ^_~
N
2007-10-18
ch 1, anon.
abuseI almost seriously cried when he had to go cut off the wolf's head. :( But then nearly squee'd with earshattering glee when Andrei/wolfy showed up all big and bad **. :D

This is so lovely.
tomato-greens
2007-10-18
ch 1,
abuseThat's adorable! And well-written, and I love all the characters, and I almost wish it had been longer. Favorites list!
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