"I pushed you, it was with both hands. Small or not."
I love that line.

Great work.

-Cat

This is gorgeous. Every single word fits and dances about naturally. I loved it

oh. mike popped into my head for that one, nice. nice nice nice.

"You'd already found that, tucked/beneath my tongue; you slid it free"

hm, my tongue danced inside my mouth at this verse.

i'm in love with this piece so much -- it's too beautiful for words because it reminds me so much of him and the things that shouldn't have happened.

somehow i can relate to this...it feels what im going through with someone right now and i love how you put it into words.

You described this incredibly well. I really liked it, and your choice of words and stanza organization were great. Good job.

So, this one is kind of average for your standards. However, I adored the idea of the piece beneath your tongue, the two bits about it (in the first and fourth stanzas) really stood out as very original and well described.