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| Zero-Sum 2007-11-08 ch 1,  | abuse"I pushed you, it was with both hands. Small or not." I love that line. Great work. -Cat |
| cynth ballerina 2007-10-24 ch 1, | abuseThis is gorgeous. Every single word fits and dances about naturally. I loved it |
| cocaine and cherries 2007-10-18 ch 1, | abuseoh. mike popped into my head for that one, nice. nice nice nice. |
| dress her up in fairytales 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuse"You'd already found that, tucked/beneath my tongue; you slid it free" hm, my tongue danced inside my mouth at this verse. i'm in love with this piece so much -- it's too beautiful for words because it reminds me so much of him and the things that shouldn't have happened. |
| Alicia Marianne 2007-10-16 ch 1, anon. | abusesomehow i can relate to this...it feels what im going through with someone right now and i love how you put it into words. |
| xfail 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseYou described this incredibly well. I really liked it, and your choice of words and stanza organization were great. Good job. |
| fairytale failure 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseSo, this one is kind of average for your standards. However, I adored the idea of the piece beneath your tongue, the two bits about it (in the first and fourth stanzas) really stood out as very original and well described. |