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| Jeffree 2008-07-23 ch 1,  | abuseokay...so this amazing. I can totally relate. after a bad break up, sometimes I feel like I see the guy EVERYWHERE and it hurts when its someone else. Sometimes I just don't want to let go of them, because they meant so much to me. Or also, when I like someone and I'm just invisible to them that hurts. I love the chorus, and especially the 5th stanza to (chorus included). Thx for the review while I'm at it, I got NO alert saying someone reviewed it so I didn't know until I looked at my stats. That's not the point though, its an awesome song that I'm totally putting under my faves to look at in those times I do need to forget about a person. The tittle really caught me too, I semi had a feeling it was about a person, but also ya know maybe just forgetting a piece of memory. |
| Jesusfreak43091 2008-07-16 ch 1, | abusei like the whole concept of the poem, it's something we can all relate to, but i don't thin it has yet reached its full potential. i think that punctuation should be modified, add more commas and/or periods. i also think the last line of the chours doesn't quite fit in. also, in the last stanza, your first and last line ryhming pattern is off with a little bit of work, i think this could be a realyl great poem |
| AK the Twilight 2008-05-19 ch 1, | abuseThis song is very emotional, which benefits as the moment of leaving each other tends to bury itself instead of just going away. "Twisting further the knife," is a great line that just shows how painful and dismissive a relationship can be when finished. It doesn't have the brilliant language and vivid views seen in your other works, but it supports its meaning so well, it's pretty easy to ignore. Keep up the great work. |
| Oracle of Destiny 2007-10-18 ch 1, | abuseTo some extent, I find this song really true as I can relate to it in some areas of my life. But what I've learnt from a close friend recently that we shouldn't worry or stress about the pass, instead of looking back we should look forward and move on :) |
| EyesEmphatic 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseThis is lovely...great song :) |