Oh my goodness, that was really good. You are an extremely talented writer, and I can't wait to read the rest of your work!

ah!

thats my way of saying "ohmygodiloveitsomuch!" in a few letters.

hehehe. kudos :D

srz

whoa.

i like it. i like it. i LIKE it.

i mean, the way you play around with the words is enough to keep me wanting to read more. seriously, it's good(:

ps: hey, maybe if you're free, take a peek at my current story eh? hehhs, thx!

wow. to me this poem really creates a conflict (thats a good thing btw!). its both peaceful and violent at the same time. i could feel something slowly building up line after line, and by the end, the tone of the peice had completely changed. great work! i really enjoyed it!

WOw this is a really good poem!
and i'm not just saying that...
the lst line was just so powerfull!!
keep writing
or ill come after you with a week old can of donkey milk...
(how i obtained that, we will never know...)
O_O