gorgeous. you should look into getting this published. it shows more skill and prowess than most poets on this website will ever faintly have. I stand (metaphorically of course) in awe.

This is just insanely gorgeous. Of course, I have an affinity for poems about writing in the first place (it's been almost all I've been writing myself lately), but this . . . You've used that birth metaphor so perfectly, and the words just fit and it's passionate and I can't find any fault in this. Gorgeous. Keep writing! :)

you ignore the conventions of verb usage and warp them to fit your idea. no active/passive nonsense.

i like it.

this is really well constructed and the carefully placed rhymes echo with anguish. the metaphors are very comendable and you have done well to sustain them through such a long piece. you've told a difficult and emotive tale without letting your motivating emotions distract from the integrity of language. a well written and very beautiful piece.