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| stained blue 2008-05-20 ch 1,  | abusei was born in january (too) that's probably why i hate it. you use your images so nicely, & no i guess flattery /doesn't/ get you anywhere. |
| she smolders 2007-10-30 ch 1, | abuseOctober for me feels full of endings and emptiness and it is the month I was born in too. I can relate to the metaphors in this so much right now. Take care. |
| xx-cronopio-xx 2007-10-19 ch 1, | abuseOne of those poems that leave me breathless. I love the improbable metaphors ("greasy linoleum frays," "a bleak shard of marchpane"); your use of imagery manages to strike that delicate balance between lyricism and realistic grit. My only suggestion would be to remove the italics; the poem is quite capable of existing purely in and of itself and doesn't appear to require any external heightening. Adieu, Kat *favs* |
| fairytale failure 2007-10-18 ch 1, | abuseI really like the two places where you use the idea of tea - first when you personify the teabag, saying it has a heart, and secondly when you said 'your eyes are tumbling cinnamon, steeped so the irises not-quite remain.' |